Veeti Heikkinen

English

28.02.2016

Jennifer Guarino

Once On This Island

I went to see the Cheshire Academy play called Once On This Island this Friday. It was a musical played by the students of Cheshire Academy. It took place in the Black Box theater in the Field House.

I usually don’t like musicals, but this one was a pleasant surprise. Time went by really fast and all the actors did a great job. Almost the whole play was singing, except just a few short parts. There was a live band playing music for the entire play.

The musical was about a girl called Ti Moune, who was abandoned in a tree when she was a baby. The peasants found the baby and took her. One peasant couple raised Ti Moune. The peasants were separated from the rich people, and they lived in their own community. There were also four Gods: The God of earth “Asaka”, the God of water “Agwe”, the God of Love “Erzulie” and the God of Death “Papa Ge”. The Gods were standing still in the background for almost the entire play, which must have been hard. The Gods wanted to see who was more powerful, God of Love or God of Death. They sent a rich boy, called Daniel, to the peasants community, who crashed his car and passed out. Ti Moune took care of Daniel and fell in love with the boy. After a few days, the rich people came to get Daniel back. Ti Moune couldn’t be away from Daniel, so she traveled to his house and the Gods helped him to get in. Daniel didn’t remember Ti Moune, but still he fell in love with her. Ti Moune lived with the rich people, until she heard that Daniel was getting married with another girl. Then Ti Moune got to choose that will she kill Daniel or die herself. This is how the Gods got to see which was more powerful, love or death. Ti Moune chose not to kill Daniel, and then she was transformed into a tree somehow.

As I mentioned, the whole play was sang, so the plot was sometimes hard to understand. Anyhow the play was really good and I enjoyed watching it.

Veeti Heikkinen

English

26.02.2016

Jennifer Guarino

Writing Center

At first, I went to the writing center during extra help. There was no one there, so I sat down to wait for someone to come. The room was really comfortable. There were desks and comfy chairs, there was even a fake fireplace. There were also Hershey's chocolate on the table, so i helped myself and ate two pieces. After a few minutes, two other students also showed up to wait for Mrs. Swift. I waited for about 15 minutes, but she didn't show up so I had to go to my next class.

At the end of my day, during my free period, I went back to see if she was there, and she was. There were two students working on their own, and Mrs. Swift was in her room. She wasn't busy, so she could help me right away. She started to read my essay out loud from my Ipad. I accidently had a few capital letters left in wrong places, because I had added something in front of them. She noticed that and we changed them. One big thing that she told me to change, was to change my essay from past to present. She also told me not to use the word “that”. She also noticed that my unfinished conclusion wasn’t good yet and she told me to work more on it. She saw that I had many sentences with the similar start and that I used the same words in different sentences. She told me that if I changed those words, my essay would become easier to read. It said that I was going to add a third body paragraph where I would connect my ideas to the real world, so the reader could see how my analysis affects their life. She thought that it would be a good idea.

Now I will write a third body paragraph and a strong conclusion. After I have written those, I will do some more revising. If I don’t have enough words after I have written enough evidences to support all of my ideas and I have a strong analysis, I will make my essay longer by adding words and more summary.

Veeti Heikkinen

24.2.2016

English

Jennifer Guarino

I think that I have a strong start in my essay, but there are a lot of things yet to work on. On my revision, I tried to make my introduction better, but I think that I should still change it a lot to make it stronger and clearer. I also started to write my ending. I still need to work on it a lot. The title that I chose for now is "what is love". I think that I need to choose a better title, because it doesn't connect to ideas and analysis as much as I'd like it to. It is easier to do later, because then I can connect it to my whole essay better. My two body paragraphs has a strong idea and some evidence. The first body paragraph analysis the book me and you. It tells how powerful love is and how it can change a person’s personality. For the first body paragraph, I need to add quotes. I think that I don't have too much summary, but I could add more, or stronger analysis. My second body paragraph of the movie little manhattan, is strong and analytical, but my understanding and analysis of the movie isn’t so strong. It is that the changes that love does to you, will stay forever. I think that I might add a third body paragraph. In that paragraph I would connect my analysis and ideas more to the real life and how they affect our regular everyday life. That way I could make my ideas more connectable with the reader. It would also strengthen my analysis of my second body paragraph.

Veeti Heikkinen
23.02.2016
English
Jennifer Guarino

What is Love

            Love is the strongest feeling in the world. When you are in love, your life starts to spin around your love. Because love is so important part of your life, it starts to affect your everyday life, even if you don’t realize it. Little Manhattan and Me and You both Show us that Love is the most powerful thing in the world when it comes to changing a person's personality.
The book Me and You Shows how even a troubled kid can be changed by the power of love. At first, Lorenzo was a young boy who had a lot of social problems. He didn't have friends and he preferred to be left alone. This shows that he needed a person who cared for him. Lorenzo also didn't care for anyone else except himself. From this we can learn that Lorenzo was really selfish. When his half sister, Olivia, came to his life and she was in need, Lorenzo slowly started to care for her more and more. After he helps Olivia, he feels really good and suddenly he felt really alive. The love between Lorenzo and his sister Olivia, changed Lorenzo from from a selfish self centered boy to a caring and outgoing person. This proves that sometimes you just need a person who you love and who loves you back in order to find a better life.
          Even though love can be really wonderful at the time, it usually ends at some point. The movie Little Manhattan proves that even if the love ended, its effect on you will stay forever. Gabe was a 11 year old boy who suddenly fell in love with a girl who he has known for years. From this we can infer that you can fall in love really fast without having control over it. Gabe was living a perfectly normal life, except his parents were divorced. Before Gabe fell in love, all he knew about love, was that love ends. After he fell in love with Rosemary, his life turned around. All his thoughts started to go around love and Rosemary. This shows how much love influences your normal day life. After Rosemary broke up with Gabe, He went home and saw his parents laughing together remembering their honeymoon. This fact shows that when the love ends, it doesn’t change the past. The memories and  the effect that love had on you, will stay the same for ever.
          From these things we can infer that love truly is the greatest power in the world. It is so effective, that it can change a person’s personality so much, that the person is almost a different person.

"Because love is so important part of your life, it starts to affect your everyday life."
This is my favourite sentence because it is really strong and everyone can relate to it, even if they don't realize it.

first draft

Veeti Heikkinen

18.02.2016

English

Jennifer Guarino

           Love is the strongest feeling in the world. When you are in love, your life starts to spin around your love. Because love is so important part of your life, it starts to affect your everyday life. Little Manhattan and Me and You both Show us that Love is the most powerful thing in the world when it comes to changing a person's personality.

The book Me and You Shows how even a troubled kid can be changed by the power of love. At first, Lorenzo was a young boy who had a lot of social problems. He didn't have friends and he preferred to be left alone. This shows that he needed a person who cared for him. Lorenzo also didn't care for anyone else except himself. From this we can learn that Lorenzo was really selfish. When his half sister, Olivia, came to his life and she was in need, Lorenzo slowly started to care for her more and more. After he helps Olivia, he feels really good and suddenly he felt really alive. The love between Lorenzo and his sister Olivia, changed Lorenzo from from a selfish self centered boy to a caring and outgoing person. This proves that sometimes you just need a person who you love and who loves you back in order to find a better life.

Even though love can be really wonderful at the time, it usually ends at some point. The movie Little Manhattan proves that even if the love ended, its effect on you will stay forever. Gabe was a 11 year old boy who suddenly fell in love with a girl who he has known for years. From this we can infer that you can fall in love really fast without having control over it. Gabe was living a perfectly normal life, except his parents were divorced. Before Gabe fell in love, all he knew about love, was that love ends. After he fell in love with Rosemary, his life turned around. All his thoughts started to go around love and Rosemary. This shows how much love influences your normal day life. After Rosemary broke up with Gabe, He went home and saw his parents laughing together remembering their honeymoon. This fact shows that when the love ends, it doesn’t change the past. The memories and the effect that love had on you, will stay the same for ever.

First first draft

Veeti Heikkinen
18.02.2016
English
Jennifer Guarino

            Little Manhattan and Me and You both Show us that Love is the most powerful thing in the world when it comes to changing a person's personality.
            The book Me and You Shows how even a troubled kid can be changed by the power of love. At first, Lorenzo was a young boy who had a lot of social problems. He didn't have friends and he preferred to be left alone. This shows that he needed a person who cared for him. Lorenzo also didn't care for anyone else except himself. From this we can learn that Lorenzo was really selfish. When his half sister, Olivia, came to his life and she was in need, Lorenzo slowly started to care for her more and more. After he helps Olivia, he feels really good and suddenly he felt really alive. The love between Lorenzo and his sister Olivia, changed Lorenzo from from a selfish self centered boy to a caring and outgoing person. This proves that sometimes you just need a person who you love and who loves you back in order to find a better life.